I'd love to get your feed back on the resubmitted version of Cave of Secrets!

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Thu Nov 23, 2017 3:52 am

I almost won with this idea before, but didn't do so well this last time.

I added a new minigame towards the end and switched out the troll since that seemed to not be very popular. I'd love to hear what else people would like to see.






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EDIT: Oops, I didn't see that they want christmas ideas this time. So I know it will be deleted, I will just post the new version here:

UPDATE: Switched out the troll this time. Also added one more BJ minigame with the goblins.

Hello! I’m the one who came up with “Evil Sorceress Rewards Minions.” It’s been a long time, but I’d really love to see a sort of ‘reboot’ of this character, reimagined by one of the other great artists on this site!

SHORT DESCRIPTION: The wicked sorceress is after a book of great power and would do ANYTHING to get it! She’ll slaughter goblins and fuck a troll!

Original reference art for the witch that I commissioned: https://www.hentai-foundry.com/pictures ... itch-Queen

To better translate this into meetnfuck style, I think the general body shape and look of the girl in “Inked Pleasures” is perfect. I’d just want her to have a bit of a darker appearance in the hair (black hair that is long and hanging down) and with the more arcane looking tattoos. Don’t worry about exactly matching the tattoos in Lucien’s drawing, just use that general idea.

FULL DESCRIPTION:

The witch queen is in a library kind of like this, staring into a silver bowl of water: http://orig10.deviantart.net/b555/f/200 ... ymunky.jpg

She is wearing a black robe that shows little of her curvy frame but just a bit of cleavage. She also has an amulet around her neck that looks a bit like this: http://img03.deviantart.net/c2b0/i/2014 ... 796lev.jpg

The following text is displayed:

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“The witch queen stared intently into the water as she scryed through time and space. She did this periodically to keep up with current events.

Suddenly, the usual, boring set of every day happenings was interrupted. She sensed that the Tome of Encroaching Shadows, a book of vast power in the dark arts, was activated for the first time in centuries!

She never thought she’d see the day! She headed out at once to find and acquire this book for her own use.”
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The next scene shows her riding on a horse through the forest as she heads out for the place where she sensed the book!

Just then, in the forest she is confronted by a horde of goblins! The goblins look like this: https://orig00.deviantart.net/fbda/f/20 ... 49c16u.jpg

The goblin shaman bellows out “There you are bitch! I take it you sensed the book too! I will have it for myself!”

She fires back “You savages couldn’t possibly hope to understand the great one’s tomb! You goblins should stick with raiding farms and humping their sheep!”

Shaman: “Fuck you bimbo bitch! People only pretend you’re good at magic because you got big tits. If you’re lucky, I’ll leave you alive so you can be a whore for my men!”

She clearly looks angered by that…

MINI GAME:

You must click on the goblin warriors that charge at you to blast them with spells. They come at you from a couple different places around the trees. Don’t make it too hard! Each time one gets to you, you lose a bit of health.

If you lose, you simply retry this minigame.

CAVE:

Once you win the minigame, she ends up in the cave. It has dark, jagged rocks, but you can see her just fine. Regardless of your performance in the mini game, her robe is very torn up! A LOT of cleavage and underboob is showing. So is much of her stomach and ass. And there you find the troll who happened to find the book.

The troll is pretty short. About 2 whole heads shorter than her. And looks a lot like this: https://img00.deviantart.net/9400/i/201 ... amuhtm.jpg

The book he is holding looks kind of like this: http://orig05.deviantart.net/d0a4/f/201 ... 9zktv7.jpg

Once you find him, the following dialog between you and the troll ensures.

Troll looks up at you with wide eyes “I know who you are, you’re the witch queen!”

She smiles down at him “That I am. I see you found something I was looking very, very hard for.”

He hands it over right away “Take it. Take it! I don’t want any trouble and I know I can hardly keep it from you!”

She takes the book and looks it over before speaking to him again “Thank you darling! I really appreciate it. …but I can’t take something so valuable without compensation! Surely there is something you want for it? I can give you gold.”

He looks a bit shy and uncertain of her offer “…I guess that would be okay, but I ain’t got much use for gold….”

She gives him a warm, friendly smile “I understand, you live alone and live off the land! But I’d like to offer you something you actually want. Surely there is something?”

He gets a silly grin on his face and looks like he wants to say something “…Well….”

She laughs “Don’t be afraid, just say it!”

He nervously says “…Can I see those huge hooters?!”

She grins happily and rips open the already torn cloth on her chest, fully revealing her pierced nipples (barbell piercings). You can repeat the scene.

This takes you to a blow job scene, slow, medium and hard before he cums on her face. The troll is of course HUGELY hung. The blow job scene is from roughly the same angle as the one in “Inked Pleasures.”

Next sex scene is her lying flat on her back on the troll’s cot in the cave. He fucks her in the pussy, slow, medium and hard. Obviously getting some good tit shaking! His cum is still on her face. He cums inside her.

Final sex scene with the troll is her on all fours, cum covered face looking at the camera (nipples are visible). The troll is on top of her, his feet on her ass, his hands holding her lower back, and his huge cock buried in her ass. Once again, slow, medium and hard before he cums inside her. This is a good reference for the “feet on ass” position I am talking about. Though I’d want her on her hands and knees, not standing up: http://imgur.com/a/0bVGG

BACK OUTSIDE:

She steps outside the cave, torn robes from the waist down, topless and covered in cum. One hand is holding the book at your hip. Her breasts are clearly visible and she is covered in cum.

A goblin yells out “DAMN! Look at those cum covered tits!”

The goblin shaman cries out “I don’t care if you do have the book, I’m taking it!”

She then blow away the shaman with a blast of black magic.

The four remaining goblins huddle around you, cowering in fear and the following dialog happens:

Goblin: “Please! Don’t hurt us! We swear loyalty to you!”

The goblin who shouted about her tits is standing there with a stupid grin on his face and a raging hard on.

She smiles broadly “Well… I could use an escort back home…”

MINIGAME 2:

Similar to the tit fuck minigame in Officer Juggs: Lust for Sail, but with blow jobs. You drag each goblin into her, and she gives him a blow job. The gobins vary a little bit by skin color, light green, darker green and black. This is viewed from a bit to the side, giving you a good view of her tits and face. She has one arm stroking their cocks. Each one that cums cums over her face and it splashes down to her tits.

Next scene is her on her side, one well hung goblin in her ass, another in her pussy, one between her tits, and another in her mouth. The usual, slow, medium and hard speeds commence with each goblin in this gangbang.

Once they are all ready, the finale is you click a place on her body for each goblin to spray their cum.

The End! Obviously, let us repeat each sex scene after beating it.

I will trust the artist’s judgment in places where I was vague.
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Thu Nov 23, 2017 4:37 am

Pravus06 wrote:
Thu Nov 23, 2017 3:52 am
I added a new minigame towards the end and switched out the troll since that seemed to not be very popular.
I like how one guys opinion means it's not very popular. :lol:

Anyway, I had a look at the new troll pic, and honestly, the first one was better. True, I'm not the biggest fan of the first pic, and if I had to say what I didn't like about it exactly, I guess it's that his body just doesn't look proportioned right and he's a bit too hairy for my liking. But of the two pics, I would go for the first, because the new one just made me go "AH! :o "

Also, you can't really submit it now because they've asked for Christmas themed ideas.
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Thu Nov 23, 2017 5:48 am

Kelumir wrote:
Thu Nov 23, 2017 4:37 am
Pravus06 wrote:
Thu Nov 23, 2017 3:52 am
I added a new minigame towards the end and switched out the troll since that seemed to not be very popular.
I like how one guys opinion means it's not very popular. :lol:

Anyway, I had a look at the new troll pic, and honestly, the first one was better. True, I'm not the biggest fan of the first pic, and if I had to say what I didn't like about it exactly, I guess it's that his body just doesn't look proportioned right and he's a bit too hairy for my liking. But of the two pics, I would go for the first, because the new one just made me go "AH! :o "

Also, you can't really submit it now because they've asked for Christmas themed ideas.
I don't know what you mean by "one guy's opinion." I was referring to how it lost! haha.

Do you have a suggestion on what kind of troll you think would be cool?
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Thu Nov 23, 2017 6:25 am

I thought you were referring to my comment about how I personally didn't like the pic. :roll:

I've had a quick look for a pic for him, but I didn't found anything. I'll keep looking if you like.
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Thu Nov 23, 2017 6:43 am

Kelumir wrote:
Thu Nov 23, 2017 6:25 am
I thought you were referring to my comment about how I personally didn't like the pic. :roll:

I've had a quick look for a pic for him, but I didn't found anything. I'll keep looking if you like.
ahhhh, sorry for the confusion. I actually heard that opinion when I had submitted him last time from a few people who liked the game, but didn't like that troll... Some others liked him, so I don't know...

And yes, I'd be grateful for opinions on the troll!
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